creative writing

One after the other my feet pound against the cold grey concrete, the lumps of broken glass piercing  my bare feet with every step i take. The short cut through the back of Mrs william garden is my best option , trying to take the least amount of steps possible so they can’t trace me. im stuck and i here a ripping sound , realising my grey rags had snagged on the corner of the barbed wire fence, i pull hard and keep going. I hear heavy breaths and realise they are gaining fast. I  take a hard left and sprint till i reach a tall building that’s coloured a faded brown, it reads  amart and co  , i grab a rock the size of my fist and forcibiling throw it into the dirty window , when it shatters i take the rock and clear the fragments of the remaining  glass from around the edge of the window panel, i reach my hand in and twist left on the silver knob, unlocking the door .Upon entering  i notice its almost pristine inside, it smelled of rose bubble bath and coconut,  you would think people actually still worked here.

I pull myself up the 4 flights of stairs, at the end a slight sweat breaking down my forehead.

The view that looks over the whole of dystopia is amazing ,the buildings are all demolished and rumble is the only memory of them even existing, i remember dad taking me up here when i was a kid, he would put his hand on the glass and say ” enjoy this , this is our dystopia” i miss him, i miss everything, how did this come to be our dystopia , it was meant to be the future, but lately ive been thinking this is the end.

the windows shattering, glass flying everywhere, blood dripping from wounds, i hear screaming, hundreds of people’s cry for help , hands  banging against the walls, then two distinct gun shots fired at my head.

i wake with a sudden jolt,  a sweet smell circling under my nose, i walk to the window and peer out, fluorescent pink orange and blue  colours take over the air  surrounding the buildings , ” smoke bombs” i mutter under my breath. I grab my back pack and open the window, looking  down i see a long fall with a grey path meeting the end, i grab onto the window rim and press my stomach against the wall , one foot at a time i shuffle along the sill till i reach the balcony of the next window, i hear a door open and low voices , grabbing the steel pole i hook my feet around and close my eyes, i count to three then let my body fall down the pool, my hands grasping then letting go. Eventually i reach the bottom of the building , peering up i see the clouds starting to settle a deep grey and two heads poking over the balcony , they whisper something to each other then jump, woooooosh and they are right next to me.

” come with us, your time is now done” he snarled 

see theres part of the story i havent told you, so by now you probably are confused by whats happening. So here it goes..

 

dystopia wasnt always like this, up to 2040 it was a peaceful city , with a warm aroma and friendly people, we had no enemy’s and that’s how we liked it. I always enjoyed chemistry in high school, i had my own little lab at home , not that i ever made anything interesting, one day i did though. 

I was mixing fenestrae and nitro methane , just as any teenage would do, to see what happened, and suddenly it started producing a purple gas, it went into my lungs and i woke up twenty minutes later, i thought nothing of it until  4 months later    , No one saw it coming, they flew over in about 100 hundred planes dropping these gas bombs , wiping out our population, except me i must be immune , bloody nazis. They destroyed half of dystopia and made it illegal to accesses any part of dystopia,  , but i knew i had a mission , to one day bring back dystopia , but that’s another story , till then i bid you farewell …. Image result for signature

preposition

Beyond the building is a ruined world, its walls traced with  lucisous green ivy. Within the water that takes over the outside perimeter, there’s millions of sculptures, some small , some big, some invisible, but they all have something in common, they don’t exist. Before you look at the pigs that take over the sky you need to under stand something, this world isn’t as it seems, one step over the grey  soldier lined bridged , and you disappear.

Romeo and Juliet literary essay

 

Fate, what is fate ? its an pre determined outcome , in this area its for the character /Romeo and juliet. Shakespeare’s play Romeo and Juliet is structured around fate, its an added depth  and motion. Its used almost to connect with each character personally, it helps understand and develop  the idea in a more detailed perspective, Fate is out of a persons control, it’s an ending or beginning or even an event that supposedly happens on purpose ,  Romeo and juliet where predetermined fate , they were born into families with a hate and despise of each other, there pre-determined fates were revealed in the prologue ” two star crossed loves , take their life” with that simple sentence ,  the theme of fate is continued on in  the play. As these words go on im going to tell you about Romeo and juliets lives and how fate is apart of it, through metaphors and then onto coincidences its shown from the beginning to the end.

In the play Romeo and Juliet, Shakespeare uses metaphors often, he uses them to pull together unlike events or descriptions and  to compare them to a completely  different event happening at the same time, they allow us to show the audience another perspective of something without giving away anything. Often Shakespeare metaphors are hard to pick up on, you have to think about the words your reading and the order they are in , which keeps the audience  tuned in and guessing what the fate of the characters could be. A metaphor is a context of words that compare two alike things  without using the word like or alike . An example of a metaphor  used in the play is…..

” I fear, too early, for my mind misgives
Some consequence yet hanging in the stars
Shall bitterly begin his fearful date
With this night’s revels, and expire the term
Of a despised life closed with in my breast,
By some vile forfeit of untimely death.”
– Romeo

Which is saying that he feels his fate is that he might die soon, which is true . Which brings me to my next point…..

Fate is tied in at many occasions in the play, many of the fates can be questionable , like was its Romeos fate to drink the poison before she woke up? the story started of with the prologue revealing the fate of Romeo and juliet to the audience, the characters unaware of it however knew that the love was doomed. The fate throughout the play seems to change,  as events make the ending look happy, however the ending stays the same and the fate of Romeo and juliet stays consistent.

“But soft, what light through yonder window breaks?
It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.
Arise, fair sun, and kill the envious moon,
Who is already sick and pale with grief
That thou her maid art far more fair than she.
Be not her maid, since she is envious.
Her vestal livery is but sick and green
And none but fools do wear it. Cast it off.”

This quote is comparing juliet to the stars and sun, Romeo  is clearly in love with her and starts to describe her with words connected with earth and  connected to  their world ,but doesn’t know yet that his fate  indeed will end in a negative manner, could this be a coincidence?

By using coincidences , Shakespeare is able to connect the story line using his different aspects. Coincidences are a unlikely event joint to another that changes the outcome or fate. An example of a coincidence in Romeo and juliet is when the  servants from the Capulet house   are in the street and they come across  Romeo and Benvolio , the servant ask for their assistance to read the names for the party,totally unaware of who they are, Romeo reads it and comes across Rosaline. Benvolio challenges Romeo to go to the party, this is when Romeo meets juliet and the coincidence unrolls.

Had Rosaline and Romeos love not just ended, then would Romeo and juliet ever meet? quite possible not but its questionable , the coincidence here is that the time Romeo is finally single he happens to meet juliet , which sparks a new form of love and frankly death.

Another  huge coincidence  in the play is that Romeo falls in love with a Capulet, which just so happens to be the worst enemy of his bloodline ( family) which results in a deadly love and ultimately death.

“Is love a tender thing? It is too rough, Too rude, too boist’rous, and it pricks like thorn.”

“What’s here? A cup, closed in my true love’s hand?
Poison, I see, hath been his timeless end.—
O churl, drunk all, and left no friendly drop
To help me after! I will kiss thy lips.
Haply some poison yet doth hang on them,
To make die with a restorative.              She kisses him
Thy lips are warm!”

This quote is the final part of Romeos life an juliets, he just drank the poison and juliet realises it, the love was doomed and ended in two deaths

” Thus with a kiss i die” thus with a kiss i must end this essay ( maybe minus the kiss) with a simple answer , just because you quite possibly might need one after my long and stretched attempt to answer our fabulous teachers question or so called topic for our assignment  …..

FATE..

Romeo and Juliet were strung along fate, it made a huge impact in this play and the characters lives, their fates were displayed at the start and played through till the end, fate was the main part of this play and seemed to be built around it . It was planned and structured to every detail , with almost every  second pulling back to the topic of fate, Romeo and Juliet were fated to love and fated to die. With that simple conclusion i must bid you farewell , Thankyou

Kirsten Blackley

Per sempre essere contuined nelle vite degli amanti attraversati dalla stella ( shakespeare got his idea for romeo and juliet from a poem which was itallian )

31/5/17 xx

 

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